Hi Taylor! I know we are supposed to focus on feedback as opposed to praise, but I absolutely love how detailed and expressive your writing is! You remain true to the story's original premise that Pygmalion despised women for their innate failings, for even with his own creation brought to life, a thing made from his own hands, Pygmalion immediately applies the faults of womanhood to her. Your revised version of Pygmalion certainly pays rigorous attention to the main character's ideals and beliefs, using them to further the story and create a tragedy. I also felt the original version lacked a sufficient ending, because I could not understand how Pygmalion could think his statue, once brought to life, would not have the same corruption that he insisted all women have. Overall, it was a wonderful and inspired story!
Hi, Taylor! I loved reading your interpretation of Pygmalion today, and especially enjoyed how well you captured Pygmalion's becoming unbalanced with his love of the statue. I think the story could grow by extending Pygmalion's origins. Why does he believe women are corrupt? What previous experiences pushed him to create an ivory woman in lieu of the real thing? I appreciate any story that leaves me with a few questions about the characters, and I think you balanced that well here!
I loved your story, especially how well written it was. It would be very sad to be in this love affair. It would be hard to create the ideal partner. I would not know how to even start making a statue that could possess all the qualities that I think I would want. It makes me think of a genie granting you three wishes, but there is always some catch.
Hi Taylor! First I just want to say that I am incredibly impressed with the detail that incorporated into your story. This line, "His paramour was modest and demure, obedient in the downward cast of her gaze, yet somehow exuding forbidden sensuality in the set of her mouth, the curve of her hips" had so much detail in it, I could picture exactly what you were describing. That is a great writing quality to have! What made you decide to end the story in that way? I know you said it seems more logical, but why did you focus on the ideas of perfectionism? I believe that is a really good thing to focus on because it is so relevant in our society. I always enjoy stories that we have written in this class where the writer alters the theme of the story to fit their beliefs or the message the original story portrays.
Hi Taylor! I know we are supposed to focus on feedback as opposed to praise, but I absolutely love how detailed and expressive your writing is! You remain true to the story's original premise that Pygmalion despised women for their innate failings, for even with his own creation brought to life, a thing made from his own hands, Pygmalion immediately applies the faults of womanhood to her. Your revised version of Pygmalion certainly pays rigorous attention to the main character's ideals and beliefs, using them to further the story and create a tragedy. I also felt the original version lacked a sufficient ending, because I could not understand how Pygmalion could think his statue, once brought to life, would not have the same corruption that he insisted all women have. Overall, it was a wonderful and inspired story!
ReplyDeleteHi, Taylor! I loved reading your interpretation of Pygmalion today, and especially enjoyed how well you captured Pygmalion's becoming unbalanced with his love of the statue. I think the story could grow by extending Pygmalion's origins. Why does he believe women are corrupt? What previous experiences pushed him to create an ivory woman in lieu of the real thing? I appreciate any story that leaves me with a few questions about the characters, and I think you balanced that well here!
ReplyDeleteI loved your story, especially how well written it was. It would be very sad to be in this love affair. It would be hard to create the ideal partner. I would not know how to even start making a statue that could possess all the qualities that I think I would want. It makes me think of a genie granting you three wishes, but there is always some catch.
ReplyDeleteHi Taylor! First I just want to say that I am incredibly impressed with the detail that incorporated into your story. This line, "His paramour was modest and demure, obedient in the downward cast of her gaze, yet somehow exuding forbidden sensuality in the set of her mouth, the curve of her hips" had so much detail in it, I could picture exactly what you were describing. That is a great writing quality to have! What made you decide to end the story in that way? I know you said it seems more logical, but why did you focus on the ideas of perfectionism? I believe that is a really good thing to focus on because it is so relevant in our society. I always enjoy stories that we have written in this class where the writer alters the theme of the story to fit their beliefs or the message the original story portrays.
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